This is a correction for the article
Walking
Dear Krishna,
‘Walking through a crowded street one evening’.The article which you have mentioned is regarding walking through crowded streets in evening and it is not a one evening experience so your title should be
Walking through crowded streets in the evening”
‘Walking is one of the good exercises. It is very good to the body.’ When we use the word ‘very good’, we must proceed it with ‘for’ and not ‘to’. We cannot say ‘maggi is very good to breakfast’, we say ‘maggi is good for breakfast’. The statement can be
”Walking is one of the good exercises. It is very good for the body”
‘Jagging is in the morning. This is young man or women exercise.’ There is a spelling mistake on the word “jogging”. Jogging is an optional exercise-it can be done either in the morning or in the evening according to the preference of the people. You can say
“Jogging is preferred to walking during mornings. This is done mostly by young men or women”
‘Life consists of varieties of experience. One of them is walking through a crowed street in the evening. Walking through crowds at any time is an experience by itself, and not a comfortable one at5 that. But such an experience in the evening should be unique by its very nature’. Life is a singular form and varieties are plural form. You can use “variety” here.
”Life consist of a variety of experiences, out of which, one among them is walking through a crowded streets in the evenings. One can imagine the street at such a time of the day. The children swarm out of their schools onto the streets, commuters in their various moods jostling one another, eager to catch a bus or to walk home realizing the futility of waiting for one. There are others who might have come out for shopping, unmindful of the crowds”.We do not walk ‘into’ a street, we walk ‘on the street’.
‘When we keep walking through such people, we meet with various sights’Here, we must understand that we cannot walk ‘through’ another person, it sounds ghost-like. Instead we can say,
”When we walk by such people, we are met with various sight”
‘ Hawkers shouting their wares try to draw the attention of those hurrying away to their respective destinations’ This sentence means that the hawkers are shouting at their own products. We can say
“Hawkers shouting to grab the attention of the hurrying passers-by to sell their wares”
‘Policeman vanity tries to regulate the traffic.’. Policeman and vanity does not match.’ Vanity’ means want of substance to satisfy desire; emptiness; unsubstantialness; unrealness; falsity. Hence we can say
“The traffic police tries to regulate the traffic,but it vain”
‘ The whole atmosphere becomes polluted with noise of every description. It is a wonder that the city dweller has not become totally deaf amidst this noise.’ This sentence means to say that due to ‘every description’ the environment is polluted. We can say
”The atmosphere is prone to noise pollution in all this hustle and bustle,no wonder the city dweller has not become deaf amidst the risks”
“Sometimes, we have to put up with the glaring and angry looks of the ones whose foot might have been trampled upon, by us in the crowd. There may be others waiting for a chance to pick the pockets of unwary pedestrians or travellers in jam-packed buses”
‘There are also gay lot heroes waiting for a chance to have a romantic experience.’ This sentence actually means that men are waiting for men to have a romantic experience. We can say
“There are also a gay lot of heroes waiting for a chance to experience romance”
‘After traversing a short distance in such a crowed place, we look down upon our clothes. The careful that we had given to our dress and our-hair style has vanished. Our clothes present a picture of a crumpled mass. We would count ourselves lucky if we a full shirt on.’ Reading this sentence actually made me laugh. What you are trying to tell is the fact that our clothing gets crumpled and we are lucky if it is not. We can say
”When we look at our clothes after the incident, we notice that it is creased. We are lucky if our clothes and hairstyle remains intact after such an incident” ’looking upon’ is used towards a person we admire or adore, for example,” our parents look upon us with pride in their hearts”
‘Yet, walking through a crowed street is not at all, a bad experience’. Not at all is used in spoken English. We must use
“Yet walking through a crowded street is not a bad experience.”
‘If we keep our eyes and ears open we can see many interesting things and also hear interesting conversation.’ We can use this statement as
“If we keep our eyes and ears open, we see and hear many interesting things and conversations”
‘It would not be a surprise if we come upon a wise discussion, a serious subject being carried on by some of the pedestrians walking along.’ This statement actually means that we have been walking along with the pedestrians and having discussed with them, come upon an idea.’ Come upon’ is used when we are involved in it. We must use,
“It would be surprising if we come across a wise discussion or a serious subject being talked by some of the pedestrians walking by”
‘The sights of a variety of people offer a study in psychology.’ We must say
“This sight of a variety of people offer a good subject to be studied in psychology.In short, we might say that walking in a crowded street in the evening is a unique experience
:D
