Friends,
This thread will be the errors and corrections for the articles posted.This is not to embarass anyone,but to help them understand the meaning and rectify it.
I will be posting the errors in the comment section as well as in this thread,so both the author as well as the members are awareof it.
I have corrected an article on I Love You
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This is a correction for the article Walking
Dear Krishna,
‘Walking through a crowded street one evening’.The article which you have mentioned is regarding walking through crowded streets in evening and it is not a one evening experience so your title should be Walking through crowded streets in the evening”
‘Walking is one of the good exercises. It is very good to the body.’ When we use the word ‘very good’, we must proceed it with ‘for’ and not ‘to’. We cannot say ‘maggi is very good to breakfast’, we say ‘maggi is good for breakfast’. The statement can be ”Walking is one of the good exercises. It is very good for the body”
‘Jagging is in the morning. This is young man or women exercise.’ There is a spelling mistake on the word “jogging”. Jogging is an optional exercise-it can be done either in the morning or in the evening according to the preference of the people. You can say “Jogging is preferred to walking during mornings. This is done mostly by young men or women”
‘Life consists of varieties of experience. One of them is walking through a crowed street in the evening. Walking through crowds at any time is an experience by itself, and not a comfortable one at5 that. But such an experience in the evening should be unique by its very nature’. Life is a singular form and varieties are plural form. You can use “variety” here. ”Life consist of a variety of experiences, out of which, one among them is walking through a crowded streets in the evenings. One can imagine the street at such a time of the day. The children swarm out of their schools onto the streets, commuters in their various moods jostling one another, eager to catch a bus or to walk home realizing the futility of waiting for one. There are others who might have come out for shopping, unmindful of the crowds”.We do not walk ‘into’ a street, we walk ‘on the street’.
‘When we keep walking through such people, we meet with various sights’Here, we must understand that we cannot walk ‘through’ another person, it sounds ghost-like. Instead we can say, ”When we walk by such people, we are met with various sight”
‘ Hawkers shouting their wares try to draw the attention of those hurrying away to their respective destinations’ This sentence means that the hawkers are shouting at their own products. We can say “Hawkers shouting to grab the attention of the hurrying passers-by to sell their wares”
‘Policeman vanity tries to regulate the traffic.’. Policeman and vanity does not match.’ Vanity’ means want of substance to satisfy desire; emptiness; unsubstantialness; unrealness; falsity. Hence we can say “The traffic police tries to regulate the traffic,but it vain”
‘ The whole atmosphere becomes polluted with noise of every description. It is a wonder that the city dweller has not become totally deaf amidst this noise.’ This sentence means to say that due to ‘every description’ the environment is polluted. We can say ”The atmosphere is prone to noise pollution in all this hustle and bustle,no wonder the city dweller has not become deaf amidst the risks”
“Sometimes, we have to put up with the glaring and angry looks of the ones whose foot might have been trampled upon, by us in the crowd. There may be others waiting for a chance to pick the pockets of unwary pedestrians or travellers in jam-packed buses”
‘There are also gay lot heroes waiting for a chance to have a romantic experience.’ This sentence actually means that men are waiting for men to have a romantic experience. We can say “There are also a gay lot of heroes waiting for a chance to experience romance”
‘After traversing a short distance in such a crowed place, we look down upon our clothes. The careful that we had given to our dress and our-hair style has vanished. Our clothes present a picture of a crumpled mass. We would count ourselves lucky if we a full shirt on.’ Reading this sentence actually made me laugh. What you are trying to tell is the fact that our clothing gets crumpled and we are lucky if it is not. We can say ”When we look at our clothes after the incident, we notice that it is creased. We are lucky if our clothes and hairstyle remains intact after such an incident” ’looking upon’ is used towards a person we admire or adore, for example,” our parents look upon us with pride in their hearts”
‘Yet, walking through a crowed street is not at all, a bad experience’. Not at all is used in spoken English. We must use “Yet walking through a crowded street is not a bad experience.”
‘If we keep our eyes and ears open we can see many interesting things and also hear interesting conversation.’ We can use this statement as “If we keep our eyes and ears open, we see and hear many interesting things and conversations”
‘It would not be a surprise if we come upon a wise discussion, a serious subject being carried on by some of the pedestrians walking along.’ This statement actually means that we have been walking along with the pedestrians and having discussed with them, come upon an idea.’ Come upon’ is used when we are involved in it. We must use, “It would be surprising if we come across a wise discussion or a serious subject being talked by some of the pedestrians walking by”
‘The sights of a variety of people offer a study in psychology.’ We must say “This sight of a variety of people offer a good subject to be studied in psychology.In short, we might say that walking in a crowded street in the evening is a unique experience
:D
Dear Krishna,
‘Walking through a crowded street one evening’.The article which you have mentioned is regarding walking through crowded streets in evening and it is not a one evening experience so your title should be Walking through crowded streets in the evening”
‘Walking is one of the good exercises. It is very good to the body.’ When we use the word ‘very good’, we must proceed it with ‘for’ and not ‘to’. We cannot say ‘maggi is very good to breakfast’, we say ‘maggi is good for breakfast’. The statement can be ”Walking is one of the good exercises. It is very good for the body”
‘Jagging is in the morning. This is young man or women exercise.’ There is a spelling mistake on the word “jogging”. Jogging is an optional exercise-it can be done either in the morning or in the evening according to the preference of the people. You can say “Jogging is preferred to walking during mornings. This is done mostly by young men or women”
‘Life consists of varieties of experience. One of them is walking through a crowed street in the evening. Walking through crowds at any time is an experience by itself, and not a comfortable one at5 that. But such an experience in the evening should be unique by its very nature’. Life is a singular form and varieties are plural form. You can use “variety” here. ”Life consist of a variety of experiences, out of which, one among them is walking through a crowded streets in the evenings. One can imagine the street at such a time of the day. The children swarm out of their schools onto the streets, commuters in their various moods jostling one another, eager to catch a bus or to walk home realizing the futility of waiting for one. There are others who might have come out for shopping, unmindful of the crowds”.We do not walk ‘into’ a street, we walk ‘on the street’.
‘When we keep walking through such people, we meet with various sights’Here, we must understand that we cannot walk ‘through’ another person, it sounds ghost-like. Instead we can say, ”When we walk by such people, we are met with various sight”
‘ Hawkers shouting their wares try to draw the attention of those hurrying away to their respective destinations’ This sentence means that the hawkers are shouting at their own products. We can say “Hawkers shouting to grab the attention of the hurrying passers-by to sell their wares”
‘Policeman vanity tries to regulate the traffic.’. Policeman and vanity does not match.’ Vanity’ means want of substance to satisfy desire; emptiness; unsubstantialness; unrealness; falsity. Hence we can say “The traffic police tries to regulate the traffic,but it vain”
‘ The whole atmosphere becomes polluted with noise of every description. It is a wonder that the city dweller has not become totally deaf amidst this noise.’ This sentence means to say that due to ‘every description’ the environment is polluted. We can say ”The atmosphere is prone to noise pollution in all this hustle and bustle,no wonder the city dweller has not become deaf amidst the risks”
“Sometimes, we have to put up with the glaring and angry looks of the ones whose foot might have been trampled upon, by us in the crowd. There may be others waiting for a chance to pick the pockets of unwary pedestrians or travellers in jam-packed buses”
‘There are also gay lot heroes waiting for a chance to have a romantic experience.’ This sentence actually means that men are waiting for men to have a romantic experience. We can say “There are also a gay lot of heroes waiting for a chance to experience romance”
‘After traversing a short distance in such a crowed place, we look down upon our clothes. The careful that we had given to our dress and our-hair style has vanished. Our clothes present a picture of a crumpled mass. We would count ourselves lucky if we a full shirt on.’ Reading this sentence actually made me laugh. What you are trying to tell is the fact that our clothing gets crumpled and we are lucky if it is not. We can say ”When we look at our clothes after the incident, we notice that it is creased. We are lucky if our clothes and hairstyle remains intact after such an incident” ’looking upon’ is used towards a person we admire or adore, for example,” our parents look upon us with pride in their hearts”
‘Yet, walking through a crowed street is not at all, a bad experience’. Not at all is used in spoken English. We must use “Yet walking through a crowded street is not a bad experience.”
‘If we keep our eyes and ears open we can see many interesting things and also hear interesting conversation.’ We can use this statement as “If we keep our eyes and ears open, we see and hear many interesting things and conversations”
‘It would not be a surprise if we come upon a wise discussion, a serious subject being carried on by some of the pedestrians walking along.’ This statement actually means that we have been walking along with the pedestrians and having discussed with them, come upon an idea.’ Come upon’ is used when we are involved in it. We must use, “It would be surprising if we come across a wise discussion or a serious subject being talked by some of the pedestrians walking by”
‘The sights of a variety of people offer a study in psychology.’ We must say “This sight of a variety of people offer a good subject to be studied in psychology.In short, we might say that walking in a crowded street in the evening is a unique experience
:D
Correction for the article What is writing really about?
Corrections are in bold letters and the explanations are in normal letters.
:)
Corrections are in bold letters and the explanations are in normal letters.
:)
Swetha,
Why shouldn't we take the permissions from the authors first before making any comment on their articles? Though people might not take it personally, it is our responsibility to give value to their privacy and views.
I would suggest you to start a thread asking the members who are interested and accepted to have a review of their articles. In this way we can avoid any controvercy as well as it would be easier for us where to comment and where not.
What do you say?
Why shouldn't we take the permissions from the authors first before making any comment on their articles? Though people might not take it personally, it is our responsibility to give value to their privacy and views.
I would suggest you to start a thread asking the members who are interested and accepted to have a review of their articles. In this way we can avoid any controvercy as well as it would be easier for us where to comment and where not.
What do you say?
Maverick,
I absolutely agree with you.The sole reason of writing the corrected review on the comments section is that,few authors just write their article and forget about it.They come on a later date and just check the 'points' and 'cash rewards'.This way,they see the comment and rectify the changes in their sentences.These people hardly view forums section.
It is quite an embarrassment for me itself when I present their corrected reviews.Please tell me if anyone has felt offended/complained against me.It is really important to review such articles because the total meaning itself changes.
Just for the sake of 'fast money' people cannot post just articles that do not convey the correct meaning.
Surely I will ask permission from the author in new thread and also in the comments section.If you feel that I am capable of reviewing articles,you can tell me so,otherwise I will decline the 'correcting' portion;where I will not correct any articles to save embarrasment faced by the author(s)
Thankyou
:)
I absolutely agree with you.The sole reason of writing the corrected review on the comments section is that,few authors just write their article and forget about it.They come on a later date and just check the 'points' and 'cash rewards'.This way,they see the comment and rectify the changes in their sentences.These people hardly view forums section.
It is quite an embarrassment for me itself when I present their corrected reviews.Please tell me if anyone has felt offended/complained against me.It is really important to review such articles because the total meaning itself changes.
Just for the sake of 'fast money' people cannot post just articles that do not convey the correct meaning.
Surely I will ask permission from the author in new thread and also in the comments section.If you feel that I am capable of reviewing articles,you can tell me so,otherwise I will decline the 'correcting' portion;where I will not correct any articles to save embarrasment faced by the author(s)
Thankyou
:)
Well Swetha, pardon me if I convey wrong meaning to you. My intention is partly conveyed by you that most of the people do not visit forums. So it would be surprise to them as they don't understand what is happening on their articles. And it would become a trouble to you as well if they reject your comments or post something wrong in public, I mean on comment there.
In order to avoid all these glitches, I thought of having an approval procedure for the articles that should be reviewed. And other than that, I personally feel your comments are amazing and in fact I am looking for a review on my articles ;)
In order to avoid all these glitches, I thought of having an approval procedure for the articles that should be reviewed. And other than that, I personally feel your comments are amazing and in fact I am looking for a review on my articles ;)
:unsure: oh
I guess you have spoken too soon?
Yeah,I know it will be an honor to review the articles, but I donot think there is correction needed for technical articles.
Just give some time so that I can learn what is boddunan.com.It has been hardly 7 days since I am here and you give me such previlages?
:woohoo: Lets not be hasty in our decisions,let us wait for the authors to come forward so that they may not think that we have been unfair towards them.They will feel that we are manipulating their views and thoughts.. :dry:
I guess you have spoken too soon?
Yeah,I know it will be an honor to review the articles, but I donot think there is correction needed for technical articles.
Just give some time so that I can learn what is boddunan.com.It has been hardly 7 days since I am here and you give me such previlages?
:woohoo: Lets not be hasty in our decisions,let us wait for the authors to come forward so that they may not think that we have been unfair towards them.They will feel that we are manipulating their views and thoughts.. :dry:
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